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My Story (Name needed)
Hornet 416 (Vandal):
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--- Quote from: Imppa on January 15, 2010, 19:12:25 ---I like it, keep going! And the grammar is pretty nice, too! Just some more dots, and it'll be even better.
No name ideas though.
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Dots?
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The mark in the end of a phrase is a dot
.<-that there.
Your sentences lack them. Dots make the text more readable.
And some commas, too.
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Ok and i am waiting for atleast one more person to comment, I might get Part 2 done tonight but that will not be known for now
EnigmaBiz:
Reads like a Play....I like it.
Suggestion Title:REQUIEM HORIZON
Requiem: noun
1. Roman Catholic Church.
a. Also called Requiem Mass. the Mass celebrated for the repose of the souls of the dead.
b. a celebration of this Mass.
c. a plainsong setting for this Mass.
2. any musical service, hymn, or dirge for the repose of the dead.
Imppa:
--- Quote from: EnigmaBiz2 on January 15, 2010, 22:04:53 ---Reads like a Play....I like it.
Suggestion Title:REQUIEM HORIZON
Requiem: noun
1. Roman Catholic Church.
a. Also called Requiem Mass. the Mass celebrated for the repose of the souls of the dead.
b. a celebration of this Mass.
c. a plainsong setting for this Mass.
2. any musical service, hymn, or dirge for the repose of the dead.
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You just love hard words, don't you?
Hornet 416 (Vandal):
Part 2 being constructed, You'll meet the Main Character soon and do you guys think i should add a timeline sort of thing?
Hornet 416 (Vandal):
Part 3 Being Constructed, Mainly this part you will here the Data Disc from the HarBringer and mainly the main characters in the Series, They are also described more than they were before
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